tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3508369164614552428.post3471811500144308775..comments2023-06-07T09:25:06.125-04:00Comments on Footsteps of a Writer - Cher Green: Famous Opening LinesCher Greenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15817089871390887197noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3508369164614552428.post-43269698787172661542010-04-08T00:31:55.144-04:002010-04-08T00:31:55.144-04:00Sandra, thanks for commenting. I agree that you sh...Sandra, thanks for commenting. I agree that you should create something unforgettable in as few words as possible.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3508369164614552428.post-2288534560379835642010-03-22T22:51:12.972-04:002010-03-22T22:51:12.972-04:00I agree with Terry about the first paragraph. When...I agree with Terry about the first paragraph. When I read I don't put the book down if the first sentence is boring. I usually give it a first page chance.<br /><br />This is what I think about famous first lines. They project an image into your head or a feeling not written.<br /><br />The clock one is spooky because of the 13. Two reasons: no 13 on the clock (obvious) and 13 is typically an unlucky number.<br /><br />The Old Man and the Sea is giving the air of miracles and asking questions. How can he still be alive?<br /><br />I'm new to writing but here's my take of your sentence. I see where you are going but it's missing the detail you mentioned in an above comment. Think of something he can do, see, hear ...smell that will make people uncomfortable. Notice I didn't say feel. You do the writing and let the reader do the feeling and thinking.<br /><br />Sounds so much easier than doing it. I'm still frazzled.Sandra Gonzalezhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06270978632360405201noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3508369164614552428.post-19997114369634023762010-03-16T08:17:55.055-04:002010-03-16T08:17:55.055-04:00Terry, I like your first line.Terry, I like your first line.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3508369164614552428.post-75619706608416882532010-03-13T08:54:10.637-05:002010-03-13T08:54:10.637-05:00The first line for my novel FLANK HAWK reads:
Guz...The first line for my novel FLANK HAWK reads:<br /><br />Guzzy signaled for my attention and pointed over the gully’s lip toward the disturbance in the undergrowth.<br /><br />Certainly not earth shattering in greatness.<br /><br />I think that while first lines are important, it's the first paragraphs that get the reader--keeps them reading.<br /><br />Even so, here is one of my favorite first lines:<br /><br />There is a similarity, if I may be permitted an excursion into tenuous metaphor, between the feel of a chilly breeze and the feel of a knife's blade, as either is laid across the back of the neck. (JHEREG by Steven Brust)Terry W. Ervin IIhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13561009802388207515noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3508369164614552428.post-63471077194196855102010-03-11T21:44:57.875-05:002010-03-11T21:44:57.875-05:00That's a good first line.
I looked at my firs...That's a good first line.<br /><br />I looked at my first line to my novel wip and it is very bland. I will definitly have to work on it, once I'm done with the whole thing.<br /><br />Metal chairs, it's just what I saw in the room. An interrogation room should be uncomfortable and what is more uncomfortable than those old metal chairs? :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3508369164614552428.post-66562320195628976422010-03-11T21:04:25.911-05:002010-03-11T21:04:25.911-05:00This is a great post! I love first lines and I swe...This is a great post! I love first lines and I sweat over mine all the time. <br /><br />My favorite first line of all time, "It is a truth universally acknowledged, that a single man in possession of a good fortune must be in want of a wife." Pride and Prejudice.<br /><br />My book's first line,<br />"Nebula’s fingers struck the keys of the Steinway and a cascade of chords tinkled down like falling stars."<br /><br />I like your first line. I wonder, why are the chairs metal? That catches my attention.Aubriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10884036126491922530noreply@blogger.com